Hello Vale,

What a really cool story. I love the girls special powers being signified by two different colored eyes. That just makes her abilities even more intriguing.

My favorite part is when the little girl hugs the woman at the pharmacy. That is a great bit of storytelling. I can picture it perfectly and it is heart tugging. I love it. Nicely done.

I genuinely like everything about this story and only have one small critique. I think the last line is a little too abrupt. I personally would like maybe just one or two words additional description of how she was found. Like maybe, found in the woods the body battered and bruised or some other minor detail.

Overall, great story. I really enjoyed it. I think it charming and original not to mention very well written. Well done. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.


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