Hey E.,

I thought you said you are proofing these now hehe. It's cool. I am going to review this one as I read it so I don't lose the errors I find.

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This is the only error I caught but I'm not the best proofreader I'm pretty exhausted.

I liked all the characterization in this chapter. It was kind of neat seeing Trey's dad unwind and it's great news about his job (I hope). I don't understand why you said you are not happy with this chapter. I think it's on par with the rest. I like it.

Is it just my imagination or is Eddy acting weirder than usual? And poor Candy, I hope she gets some help soon. Trey is a sweetheart but pretty dense.

Anyway, I think this is a great transitional chapter. I saw nothing that needs worked on. Keep in mind they can't all be cliffhangers. Don't be so hard on yourself, E.

I'm still chomping at the bit for more hehe.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



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