Hello Fjona,

This is a superbly well written story. I enjoyed it so much. You did an excellent job with pacing and I like how you took your time with the first section set-up.The characterization you establish in that part is just sublime.

Jonathan is despicable and totally without remorse which is my favorite type of villain. The reader gets such satisfaction when they get their just rewards.

I really like the way you portray Abby's ghost as detached and emotionless. That is logical to me and adds a sense of realism to the character.

The ending was the best. I loved the gruesomeness of it. Which is direct contrast to how I felt about the gruesomeness of Abby's death. Again, that is a testament to how well your characters are written. I hated Jonathan but loved Abby.

Overall, this is just a great story. I liked everything about it. The characters, the setting and the tale itself. Your writing style is clear concise and easy to follow with an interesting voice. Thank you for sharing this and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.


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