Hello Linzzy,

Wow. Okay this is going to be a very honest review so please don't take offense. First of all I think this poem is honestly a masterpiece of the written language. I mean that sincerely. It is beautifully written and the emotions it stirs are quite consuming. So why would you be offended? I know right?

Here it comes, everything that is to follow are things I have been told by others who have reviewed my meager attempts at poetry not how I feel. Let me reiterate this is what I have been told NOT how I feel.

This poem is written in the classic style used by the poetic greats and thus sounds very antiquated. Which in turns makes it sound like you are trying to imitate the greats which is frowned upon by the poetry snobs. I was told this same thing when I tried to write a poetic ballad set in the time of The Highwayman. I wasn't trying to intentionally imitate anyone but that is the type of poetry I read so it stands to reason that is the type I would try to write. I was quickly set straight by the We-Know-Better-Than-U Alumni.

Apparently, anyone born in this century is restricted to the current curriculum of hip-hop verse, satirical poem, dirty limericks or wrist-cutter emo poems. Anything else will be unfavorably compared to the greats and disparaged until the poet either removes the offensive material or stops writing entirely. Okay so I'm exaggerating here just a bit. I am sure there are many people who will like this poem as much as I do.

I have to say though it does get quite heated. There were times while reading I totally pictured myself in my High School Principal's office getting read the riot act. My ass feels thoroughly chewed. Yeah, just a bit preachy hehe.

As for form, language and content I think this piece is impeccable. I can find no fault with it anywhere and as I said before I truly feel it is a masterpiece of words. I am in awe of your ability. Bravo!

I hope you find this review helpful and not overly harsh in anyway, if anything I was going for funny or lighthearted it is never my intention to offend only to give honest and constructive reviews. Thanks for sharing. As always I look forward to reading more from you.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



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