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| Hey E., Oh man, here it comes. I don't know if I'm more excited or more dreadful. Please, please, please tell your parents. Why do I get the feeling they ain't going to tell Trey's parents? Don't tell Jenna, don't tell Jenna, don't tell Jenna. Why do I get the feeling they are going to tell Jenna? You know E., it's not to late to change the story. How about if Eddy lives and we just end the tragedy sandwich with Candy? Hmmm? Come on... Why do I get the feeling this ain't going to end happy? Damn. "Yes, Chief," I nodded my head as Dad patted my bald head. P9 S1 (sounds repetitive) "You a local hero, yourself, Danny," P11 S1 (do you want to use "You" here or "You're")It was ashame to him him all wrinkled and gray and showing his true years. P22 S6 (double hims)There was a pretty teenage girl, at least five years older than me if her breast told a story, that was lighting candles with a Bic lighter as people past passed. P24 S2We were a good twenty yards form from the stage, but we weren't getting any closer. P28 S2I also need to thank my prediscessor, Hap Carringer," another pause for applause, this one louder than the last one, "for helping to put all this together. P31 S5 (I assume "prediscessor" is an intentional misspelling but just in case) I heard the explaosions explosions; BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! P36 S6My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  .  Answering your request for a review on behalf of "Invalid Item" !  ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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