Hello Kate,

I enjoyed this story very much it was quite entertaining. I think it might have been scarier if you had shown at least one incident of a Grimoiratti actually killing and eating a brain.

One thing that I would like clarified as a reader is if the Grimoiratti can assume the shape of anything why wasn't that ever mentioned? All we are told is that they are wizards from the middle ages so their actual abilities are unknown. Maybe that is how they escaped from the knights is by assuming the shapes of animals or other people?

Also I am unclear if the man with the red and pink handkerchief is really a Grimoiratti or did he just over hear the conversation and wants to scare the children? If he and Blue are both Grimoiratti wouldn't they recognize each other? Would they attack each other? Blue was obviously going to attack him. Did you intentionally leave this all up to the reader to figure out?

I understand that leaving things up to the imagination is a great technique used in the horror field but I think if you leave too much up to the reader they will get frustrated and feel cheated. I personally like resolution in the stories I read but that could just be me.

Overall, I thought this was a pretty good story. It was very original and quite captivating. I thought the dialog was well done and natural sounding and the characters are rich and interesting. As I said before I would have liked a bit more clarification on exactly what happened and more resolution on the final encounter but still it was a fun read.

Thank you for sharing I look forward to reading more from you in the future.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



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