Hello Bruce,

Let me just start by saying... DAMN! This is a phenomenal piece of writing. You took creep to a whole other level with this tale. I love everything about it.

The way you skillfully conceal Bernie's creepiness while making Karl's ambiguous is brilliant. There is a very fine line there and you walk it perfectly. Well done.

It is amazing how you play off Bernie's actions as paranoia and over reacting right up til the end. But then his true nature comes through when you find out he brought a garbage bag to the investigation. Again, pulling this off is just a stellar example of your writing ability.

Of course the absolute best in when you hit us with the big reveal at the end and we get to see just how deep the paranoid delusions run. The beauty of it all is the fact that he doesn't even know he is screwed up. Which is what really makes this story scary in my opinion. That's just awesome.

Anyway, I think this is an incredibly well written piece of fiction. It is truly one of those pieces I wish I had written myself. I am so glad you entered it in the contest and congratulations on that win by the way.

Great story, enjoyed every word of it thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



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