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Given: Nov 4, 2011 at 5:06pm
Length: 968 Characters |
968 w/o WritingML
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OVERALL SENSE: The POV was out of sequence, and I think if you re-read the poem, you will be able to mend it very quickly.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I see nothing at all wrong. Well done!
AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: "I looked at him in bewilderment" Somehow that doesn't seem to appropriate. Perhaps, feeling bewildered, I saw him ...
Your expressions and descriptions are quite good and well-suited for the moments shrouded in mystery.,
You are indeed a very talented and prolific writer; someone who emotes palpable feelings. You draw from your innermost imagination a very profound poem.
It was nice to meet you, Myterious Wolf, and a pleasure to read your work. I hope to read lots more.
Lola
You responded to this review 11/04/2011 @ 8:32pm EDT
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