Hi jmariah

My name is Ken and it is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "Two-in-One Poetry Contest"  [13+].

First Impression/Thoughts:
Stunningly beautiful!

Creativity/Impact:
Perhaps it's just me but I found this so touching. There's such a gentle finality to your words that it pulled me back to a moment in time when it this was my reality - the passing of my wife.

Content:
You write of a final farewell - but your imagery, your gentle expression of the moment, is almost magical. It touched me on so many levels and made me feel the beauty of the moment as well as the sadness that overwhelmed. A truely wonderful write that deserves appreciation and understanding.

Technical Notes:
Flawless.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
I haven't read many poems (or, in fact, many writes at all) that touched me like this one. I understand that every poem is incomplete until read as each readerwill add their emotions and interpretations to the words of the poet. In this case, I can only add my thanks to you for sharing this - and allowing me to add my own parts to this brilliant and touching write. Bravo!

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Ken