This is a fantastic story! I applaud you for writing such a great piece in so few words, that's a hard skill to come by. This story is well plotted, you use your alotted words with extreme effectiveness. It might be a cliche, the vampire and the beautiful human girl, but it is a good cliche. This is actually quite funny to me, as I was a vegetarian for about four years! Grammatics are good as well! I see nothing that you could do to correct this piece, so please tak my only suggestion and, write on!