First Response: Strong conviction and passionate.

Characters: Narrator is obviously very upset, angered, etc. and the emotional element is conveyed well.

Spelling and Grammar: This is what caused the most loss in points to be rated. A lot of run on's, no periods or commas, no apostrophes, etc. Basically no consideration was issued for punctuation, grammar, spelling. Considering the subject and tone, this piece was mostly likely written in a state of increased frenzy and emotion, but it's always a good idea to revise and edit to the best of you ability before posting.

Good Points: Strong conviction and tone, with the emotional aspect well portrayed.

Suggestions: Rework the grammar, spelling and punctuation right off. Watch for repetition.

Overall: Good piece with potential. Easily relate-able.