First Response: Emotionally jarring piece that resonates after it is finished.

Characters: The narrator and subsidiary characters interaction is interesting and unique. Thought provoking and existing in a more in depth level.

Spelling and Grammar: Recheck spelling and grammar, especially punctuation.

Good Points: Heart warming and thought provoking.

Suggestions: Work on the grammar and maybe a little structural reorganizing.

Overall: Great heart felt piece I enjoyed reading.