First Response: Emotionally resonating and overwhelmingly sad.
Characters:N/A
Spelling and Grammar:Needs the most work, correctly punctuating, spelling, and organizing would increase the rating at least a full point alone!
"dat" is that
"yours and your.." should be "your siblings and your".
"ma" should be my
"siblings stuff" should be "siblings' stuff"
Good Points: Strong narration and conviction.
Suggestions: Work on the presentation, including spacing and punctuation/grammar.
Overall: Good piece with real potential!