First response: Solid writing, very individual and unique.
Characters:N/A
Spelling and Grammar: Punctuation, capitalization, grammar, and spelling seems almost complete!
However "imgination" should be "imagination".
"And pop" they.." should be "And pop" They ..."
Good Points: Strong and articulated theme that was well presented and conveyed.
Suggestions: Work on the above mentioned spelling and capitalization issues.
Overall: A solid piece that's simplicity is under rated and endearing.

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