Hello Lucy Grace ,



I came across your poem by browing the Read a Newbie section and would like to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind that they just reflect my personal opinion, so feel free to pick out whatever seems fitting and ignore the rest

What I liked
I enjoyed reading this bittersweet poem - it is heartfelt and carries a lot of emotion.
I liked the repititions, in my opinion they add impact to what you're expressing here. You poem flows very nicely, it is a pleasure to read it aloud.
The title fits nicely, too - good choice!

Room for improvement
I spotted some little typos - a missing apostrophe in line 4, your in line 6 should be you're, u in stanza 6 should be you. I also suggest you go over your poem and capitalize all first poerson pronouns.
I alos think your poem would look (and rea) better if you put question marks after questions instead of just periods.

Overall impression
This is an enjoyable, bittersweet love poem - just polish it up a bit, and it will be great! Thank you for sharing this and keep it up!

Happy holidays to you

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