First response: Well written and intriguing.
Characters:N/A
Spelling and Grammar:"cant" should be "can't".
"to him a wet dream, to her, an.." should be "to him a wet dream; to her, an "
"sense" should be "since"
Use periods at the end of sentences.
"it to the her subliminal" should be "it to her subliminal"
Good Points: Emotionally potent and raw with a strong tone and voice throughout the piece.
Suggestions: Perhaps consider lengthening it, as well as fix the simple grammar and spelling errors.
Overall: A good solid piece with substantial room for growth and improvement from very little fine tuning.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .