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 | I'll still love you anyways  [13+] A poem about how I used to ask god why he made me gay  |
| (4.0)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Title: I'll still love you anyways Author: brandonb194 Type: Poem  Analysis:It is sad that due to outside pressure, people have to wish they were different from who they naturally are. That tells a lot about the pressure of society. For me, the problem with the poem’s message is: I am not sure what it is. I do not know if the speaker regrets being gay, feels guilty and wishes he could change, or if it’s just a somewhat convoluted way of asking God to be with the one the speaker cares about. I can make guesses, but that is all they would be. There are also a few minor typographical issues:  Suggestions: Line Two:I ask you everyday “everyday” means commonplace. I think you want, “every day” meaning “each and all days.” You’ll want to look at line seven too, since it also uses the word “everyday”. Line Eight:its hard to grip I think you want “it’s” (it is.) Line Ten:I dont ask You just forgot the apostrophe, “don’t.”  Final Thoughts:Assuming this is in reference to God, it is good that at the end, the love for God is still there. It is easy to love God when times are good. It takes a lot more strength no to lose that faith when times are tough. There is a glitch or two but over-all I enjoyed reading your poem, and understand questioning life. ** Image ID #1829823 Unavailable **
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