Review of showering acts of joy



Why I chose this piece I like essays. I like learning new things and getting some ideas from others

Overall impression of piece: You are right. There are no overnight successes. Even Bill Gates took time. He spent some time in very cheesy surroundings building up his empire. I think there is a service component to everything. Why are we on the planet and what purpose do we serve?

Grammatical and spelling errors: Psychic is an adjective. I think you are looking for Psyche. Judging their psychic would be the person they used to determine the future. You in mind paragraph needs a capital. Ordinary is just ordinary

What I liked?: I like the basic intent of this. It is to the point, direct and concise. I think you have given this some thought

What I dislikedMagic trip or wound. I think wound might be related to the Holy grail and Sir Perceval, but I am not certain where you are going with this. Be specific or leave it out. I think adversity does have something to do with success. Lincoln failed twice and much as he succeeded. You give us three parameters to do something, but you really aren't specific what we are doing in our quest.

How the piece made me feel: You took us on a journey, but it seems kind of incomplete. What should we do and why? I am not sure why we should think you have the wisdom of the ages? Experience is the best teacher and letting us know some background is very influencial. I suspect you have very great things to say. Don't be afraid to really say them

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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