Review of showering acts of joy

Why I chose this piece Anniversary review. This is one of the few essays I hadn't already looked at

Overall impression of piece Pretty necessary thing to talk about. Most families have n o idea and the kids kind of tell the parents


Grammatical and spelling errors Agreed upon I don't think needs a hyphen, Perhaps the best should be set off with two dashes, not tyo hyphems./ Sticking to it set off by dashes. Personally I only use dashes once per piece.


What I liked?: You set up the parameters for your argument in the first introductory paragraph. Good call to action right from the beginning. Nothing is not a clever thing to do. You actually put together a pretty good conclusion where you make your pitch based on what you have said

What I disliked: Half age concept never really discussed. I am not sure what you meant. Parents can't guarentee anything. I have never taken any back to the manufacturer for a rebate.

How the piece made me feel: I like you talking about this issue. Most don't deal with it well. I think the impetus is to ask the right questions. You have done that even though it is a bit between the lines, Maybe being more direct with questions would help

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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