Review of showering acts of joy

Why I chose this pieceI saw this and was intrigued. I volunteer at a Military museum. Anniversary review

Overall impression of piece: You wonder how these things get started. I think this is a great tribute piece to an extraordinary man

Grammatical and spelling errors: Commercial jets that flew sentence really doesn't have a verb. Not a sentence, Creme de la creme I think needs hyphens. A young man who learned sentence really doesn't have a verb so is not a sentence

What I liked?: I loved the description of your youngster picking out the planes. Reminded me of Tattoo shouting de plane whenever a new plane came into fantasy island

What I disliked I would assume that the boy's father is out of the picture. To say he is the most important really asks for explanation. You talk of transformation to his love of airplanes. I think that needs to be explained a little more. If there is anything about watching airplanes as a family that transferred from him, that shsould be recorded. He was a young man born.... All men are born young. Kind of an odd sentence

How the piece made me feel I do get the feeling. I still like baseball today because my Dad took me to games. To me that was a part of belonging. To actually play the sport took co-ordination. My Dad was a good athlete, but not a good teacher.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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