Review of showering acts of joy



Why I chose this piece Essay trolling. Newbie review

Overall impression of piece: I can't disagree with anything you say. We certainly don't live in a world that thinks too much

Grammatical and spelling errors: Before your speak, that's God missing an apostrophe

What I liked? Great intro sentence. I think it is exactly right. God knows most of the time what is right. I would go 100% on that one. Sometimes we take action on ourself that isn't warranted

What I disliked{e:idea:} Starting a sentence with so or but are kind of fillers and don't add anything to your message. Remember to think needs to be expanded. I think we are what we think and if it leaves our mouth, we have little opportunity not to agree with it. We often are what we say. I don't have a good feel what common instincts are. I would make that clearer

How the piece made me feel A fellow wrote a book ON What to say when you talk to your self. Interesting thoughts

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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