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 Walk Away ... His Story Open in new Window. [13+]
His perspective walking away.
by Marleigh Rose Author Icon
Review by Sarah Kate Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Thumbsup*What I liked*Thumbsup*: I liked seeing the man's perspective of going to war, hearing his thoughts and how he feels about leaving his wife. The struggle he faces with staying strong, not only for himself, but for his wife.

*Thumbsdown*What needs improvement*Thumbsdown*: I only have a couple of grammatical suggestions.

*Bullet*You Wrote: She was, no is, my best friend, my rock and the best damned wife I will never deserve.
*Bullet*I Suggest: She was; no, is; my best friend, my rock and the best damned wife I will never deserve.

*Banana*Food for thought*Banana*: Overall, a wonderful short story from the soldier's perspective as he leaves home. I could really feel his love for his wife in this short story. Good job, and Happy Anniversary!

Sarah Kate


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