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The Gray Moment Open in new Window. [ASR]
A story about someone who finds strength in the smallest thing, and how she lets it go.
by Chandler Harp Author Icon
Review of The Gray Moment  Open in new Window.
Review by Sarah Kate Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Thumbsup*What I liked*Thumbsup*: I loved your idea of the "Gray moment," that time between morning and night where you don't have to exist, where you can let go of everything, and just be nothing. Very interesting idea.

*Thumbsdown*What needs improvement*Thumbsdown*:
*Bullet*You Wrote:so no one was expecting me to call them the second Bobby Meuler asked me to the homecoming dance, or invite them to my ‘Super Sweet Sixteen’ party.
*Bullet*I Suggest: This sentence was very confusing to me. First, it is a run-on sentence. Secondly, I wasn't sure whether you were saying that the second Bobby Meuler was going to ask you to the homecoming dance, or if these were two different thoughts...


*Banana*Food for thought*Banana*: Thank you for sharing this piece. It was very well written. Good job!

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Sarah Kate


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