Hi maddyb191
I read your story, here is my review.
Please remember, I'm a writer, just like you, and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.



OVERALL SENSE: Dreams, I'm told are where you work out your problems that seem to plague you during the day. You must have something to do with water. That is what basically you seem to dream about. Maybe a fear of drowning. I don't remember my dreams, only some of them, and most of mine are not scary at all, thankfully.

         TITLE: You title,"A Scary Town", fits your story. You always happen to be in the town when this scary dream happens.

         STYLE/VOICE: The author's voice is strong and firm as she writes about her scary dreams. Written in "I" form, she relays two nights of dreams that seem to be based on the same theme.

         SCENE/SETTING: The setting is the author is in her bed dreaming of this town, then scary things happen. In the first dream, she is with her father where they are visiting with friends. They leave to enter an abandoned building where a giat 500' wave engulfs them.

         CHARACTERS: The author is informing her reader of two recurring dreams.

         PLOT: The author had two dreams that dealt with the same thing happening, only she's with different people each time. The first time she's with her father and the second time she's with her friend. But, basically the same thing happens. When she experienced this wave coming ashore with her father, she was frightened. But, with her friend, they just waited patiently for the wave to hit them. But nothing happened.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I found a few errors that I would like to bring to your attention. You have other mainly typing errors that I didn't correct, just edit your story and you will find them.
Though I spend most of my nights laying in bed--You want the word Lying here
and has intreagued me--You spelled intrigued wrong.
that I gave to the reoccuring --you want the word reoccurring, with two r's here
appearence in every one of these dreams--you mispelled appearance
A larg,e circular, flat top stone --typing error
our hands apart from eachother's--Each other's should be written separately
flooded buliding alone--Typing error

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: You should always reread your story and try to make sure there aren't any errors.

FAVORITE LINE(S): To our surprise, the wave did not hurt us. It defied every law of physics ever proposed, and practically jumped out of the left side of the water, cleared the beach, and crashed into the right side of the water, drowning the many people swimming in it. After this, I woke up.

COMMENTs: With those lines above, maybe you conquered your fear of something in your life. The second time that huge wave came at you, you were unafraid, so maybe you won't have that dream again. Hopefully. Good job with the story. I enjoyed it.


Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie