It’s intriguing, compelling and uniquely written. I can’t say I like that you throw away all that you had created with those final words, I am her shadow. I would have much preferred that you left it open ended. Allow readers to try to piece this we;;-woven tale together and try to decide for themselves just what these creatures are.

True, shadows were one of my possibilities, but because you had mentioned them within the story, I didn’t take that as the likely answer. I was thinking one’s soul, or aura, or even some parallel, in another dimension that somehow has a connection to humanity and life.

That is a shadow, is well created of course, I just would have preferred that you not hand the answer to the readers, let us think, we get so few opportunities to use our brains, lol.

But it is a good story, a very good story which captures the essence of life, maybe because, in a way, the shadow is the opposite of life, it’s the reflection of it, and yet related, in that, it is an image of that life.

I do have a few minor suggestions. When you say, I move though a shadow and my existence spreads I can see how “though” fits there, but I also wonder if you mean, “through.”

Later you write, They are too simple of organisms. To me, that just sounds a little awkward. Might you mean, “the are too simplistic (or simple) of an organism”?

In paragraph six, sentence two, you write, Thoughts were shared and analyzed all in the mere seconds of passing each other or under the cover of night.

It reads somewhat awkwardly. It is also a passive sentence. Removing the word, “or,” won’t make the sentence more active but it will make it read better, I think.

In that same paragraph, I don’t think you need the apostrophe in, “owner’s.”

In the last paragraph, you mention a “her.” It’s the first reference to a person, and you never explain who this person is. I don’t mean to spell it all out for the reader, but maybe you should have mentioned this “her” early on in the story, (even in some cryptic way to keep your readers unsure) but at least then when you do mention “her” at the end, she has been mentioned and doesn’t make the unexplainable appearance.

Beyond my suggestions, I found the story to be creative, perplexing, and in the end, just an excellent story. It showed not only something about man, but also about the author too, and that is quite simply, that you wrote a very good story. As far as the shadows, I think they say a lot more about us, than they do themselves. In every serious way, those shadows know what we know, that feeling of being left out, of not being complete, of not having all we can have. Those are all very human, and other reason to like your story.