Review of showering acts of joy



Why I chose this piece I like essays, nature and new writers

Overall impression of piece: I think this is a piece about what its like to be you. There are exciting things in your world

Grammatical and spelling errors: day-to-day, fresh air sentence doesn't have a verb, hyphen should be a dash. Tide-engineered with a hyphen

What I liked?: This is very descriptive. I envy some of your existence. I know you have been there by the level of complexity that is in your work. I like the list. Knowing what one or more of these mean to you would help

What I disliked: Never really said where this was. I can look at a map, but would need more help. This kind of rambles. The writing seems to be a major idea, then is totally lost. Tell them what your going to tell them. Tell them. Tell them what you told them. Have a point for everything your write

How the piece made me feel: I guess the poem this reminds me of "I must go down to the sea again, It is ok to be excited about this. Start with I and kind of breakdown to a we,. I would specifiy the other

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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