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![]() ![]() ![]() It is a nice beginning and at this point you can go almost anywhere with it. That is the fun of a new story, the path is completely open, wherever you take it is up to you. It does look like a budding school romance will be part of the story. I did see a couple minor typos: In sentence two: "Nothing seemed to exciting It should be, "too." In sentence four: I wa hanging out with my friends I assume you wanted, "was." I don't think you need the word, "had" later in that sentence either. That aside, I can see the potential, and hope you enjoy writing the rest of the story. Review from "Let's help each other grow- Closed" ![]()
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