This review, obviously, is just my opinion. If my suggestions help, I am glad. If not, please don't take it personal, because it wasn't meant to be.




It's interesting, I'll give you that. There i a lot of action here, I'm not sure what all of it comes from or will be heading, but for those who like action, this appears to be their kind of story.

I do wonder why you are calling humans, "it." Why not "he" or "she?" It is usually reserved for something which is not human. By the description it doesn't sound entirely human-like. Which I guess makes for an intriguing monster/human.

There are a few typos and punctuation issues here, "screaches" (screeches,) being one, which hopefully won't be in the actual novel. But I guess people will help you edit if you post individual chapters here.

From what I've read on this site, this is a popular genre and therefore should find any number of readers, and that is the primary reason most of us are here, to be read.

I wish you luck with your novel.