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| This is a review from Let's Help Each Other Grow! I had to drop by and reciprocate your kind review.  Plot and Emotional Impact:  The story is funny. I could picture Tribbles the "rodent" climbing down the prim and proper lady's arm, and the lady screaming and the chaos as a result. Very funny! The lady with the strawberry was great. You have a wonderful sense of humor, which shines throughout this piece. The house sparkled, even the toilets. The ladies were due. I kept giggling, wondering if one of them was expecting a baby. You had several cute lines that had me smiling throughout.  Characters: The women were stuck up. But one of them was intelligent enough to see that Tribbles definitely deserved a treat.  What I liked:  You have a nice narrative style. It is casual and engaging. I could just picture that guinea pig getting into trouble--trouble with Tribbles!  Suggestions: I am here to help you. Please take whatever helps you from my review and discard with the rest.  I have a few small edits for you. I hope these help. You have an adorable story here. I could just picture Tribbles getting into trouble. This was a very cute and fun story. Tribbles is a short hair guinea pig, with brown hair on his back and white on his belly and feet. He has brown ears,yelloweyes and a very cute button nose. Put a space between yellow and eyes. Fundraising is the correct spelling. Uproar is one word. Finally we were all finished. The house sparkle from top to bottom, even the sparkled Funny line: He wasn't sure whether to trust this person, but he did love strawberries! Favorite line: I don't need to be in a club and i have found myself a lovely new friend. You did a nice job with this. It is funny!  ~Golden ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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You responded to this review 07/18/2012 @ 11:57pm EDT