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Jo Anne, I saw your update and I had to read this. It is more than a mystery.

Emotional Impact:
This story reminds me of hearing odd noises in a basement, when I was babysitting. I freaked out, grabbed a baseball bat, and headed down the stairs. You had me on the edge of my seat wondering what in the world was going on in the basement? You did a great job and some very suspenseful writing!


What I liked:
The main character was someone I could identify with, who saw the spiritual side of things. I liked her immediately. I was worried, when she went down the stairs alone. Then her mother didn't see it! What in the world? She is the only one that can see it! She must have a gift or something, but why? This made me want to read more and delve further.

Suggestions:
I liked this from the beginning to the end. I would go deeper with her thoughts about the man. What really grabbed me was the part with the tiles, and how he disappeared. Go deeper! I wanted more. It sounds extraordinary.

You responded to this review 07/28/2012 @ 7:55pm EDT

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