Hello, just to let you know I'm not a professional, just a writer like you.
Over all Sense
I love it, great story line, once It got going.
Areas of improvement
“General, which path shall we take?” asked a knight beside him. Make this your first line of your story, and everything above it, you can show as your story progresses. They key thing to remember is to first draw the reader in and second keep them reading. Start with an action or event, dialog is a good way. Then show not tell what is happening.

FAVORITE LINE
“This is it; a cursed shrine. Fortunately, curses have no effect on those who have the Spirit of God, “ said the General

Thank you for writing and posting this wonderful piece on here for me to read. If you decide to revise it please let me know I would enjoy reading it again. Mystic Angel