Hello, just to let you know I'm not a professional, just a writer like you
OVERALL SENSE
I could visualize from start to finish. I felt like I was in the cockpit with the pilot. The bomb at the end, and questioning God on why, was a nice twist to the story. The realizing she had dreamed it all, was a surprise. Nice.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
AREAS OF IMPROVEMENT
which I later learned had devastated entire towns. (leave this out, it takes away from the suspense of the story)
FAVORITE LINES
“Dude, we have every need to fear, the freaking plane is going down if we don’t think of something fast…” said the copilot ( this made me realize it was a guy flying the plane, when I had been envisioning a girl. Really good way of drawing your readers back into the pilot character.
“Not much,” I replied. “No rivers around to ditch in, not many open meadows either…” (nice balance, the pilot stayed calm, while the copilot was frantic.)
Thank you for writing and posting this for me to read. I enjoyed the adventure. Mystic Angel