This poem is not an easy read, but I get the feeling that it was not meant to be. The form has no syllable structure per se, but it does have a rhyme scheme. The line which gets repeated four times is a good choice because the idea of an individual "creating Hell" is an extremely powerful image.

I guess if I wanted to suggest improvement, it would be to make it generally more specific. I want to know more about what the author did to "create" this Hell. As written now, it's a little bit vague.

In addition, there were a few lines, I'm not sure I followed. "I fled this how of ruined dreams". I'm not sure what "how" means there.