Hi KerrieAnn

I have just read your work. I tried. and here is my review of this poem
I and sending you this, in a hope that my humble opinion as a reader can be useful to you.


Overall impression :
I found you poem visually pleasing, and the questions in the beginning of each stanza steered me in your poems direction. The last line was fitting as it tied up the subject matter and title quite nicely, but from a personal point of view it gave me a feeling of rendition as if you where giving in and conforming yourself with believing that you did try so that was enough. (but that is just me that loves happy endings! .


Structure/ contents :

The structure was simple but effective. I could feel your anguish and torment as you realised that you did not succeed in your plans.

Suggestions :
My only suggestion would be to rephrase the 4rth stanza and not end each line with a question. It just seems too many questions and not enough answers there.


Thank you for sharing your work.
I look forward to reading more soon.


Samantha
sssam-on the way back