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 Fickle Child Open in new Window. [E]
An attempt to write a French Huitain
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there 1906302. I found this item in "I Write in December-January-February" Open in new Window.. Before I begin my review please note that these are my views as a reader and are not meant to offend in any manner.

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Imagery Created

You mother does seem like a tyrant. First she forces you to be clean, and then she forces you to get out of water so that you don't prune under the spray. Poor, poor you. I will send a mail to UN Secretary to make a human right law for you. *Bigsmile*

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Language, grammar and form

Your syllable count and rhymes were perfect. I did not find any issue anywhere. Though I did wonder about the fact that you shower gives soapy water. Mine gives normal hot water.

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Punctuation

Perfect. *Thumbsup*

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Favorites and Not-so-Favorites

My favorite was the extreme wisdom of you Mom portrayed in the story.

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Other thoughts and suggestions

I enjoyed the poem very much. It was funny and wise. No other suggestions.

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