Hi Lonewolf

I have just read your work Chocolate and here is my review of this poem


Overall impression :
Well, being a chocolate lover myself I obviously loved this poem. I totally understand the love/ hate/ but truly love relationship I have when eating chocolate. At first I experience the feelings of lust and admiration unwrapping it, then it transforms to desire while eating away, I then turn to total surrender and once finished I am definitely grateful of the pure pleasure I've had.
You amplified these experiences in each stanza of the poem, and had me wanting more once finished. I also quite liked the repetition of the word "Chocolate...." throughout the poem, it not only made me pause and saviour each thought, but it was kind of like placing subliminal messages in the movies.. I just wanted chocolate even more!! hhmmmmm


Structure :
As I mentioned, I really enjoyed that you divided each stanza into a different emotion. You used great imagery and the idea of making chocolate a mistress and personificating it worked really well.


Suggestions :
My only small suggestions would be to add some simple rhyme. On the third stanza the last two lines rhymed, and on the last stanza the first two lines rhymes, but I later realized this was just a coincidence and it actually sounded nice.


Best part :
Obviously the topic was my favourite part, but I must mention that your diction and imagery was great too.


Thank you for sharing your work.
I look forward to reading more soon.


Samantha
sssam-on the way back