Hey Tessa. I found this item in "I Write in December-January-February" . Before I begin my review, please note that these are my views as a reader and are not meant to offend in any manner.


Memories, memories, memories. It is meant for senior citizen contest, I wonder if the memories goes sweeter with time or do they remain the same? This poem captures the childhood memories quite nicely. I cans feel those holidays and those trips and the kind of fun you must have so as to tickle those memories again.


The usage of forms seems to flow well with respect to the poem. I do not have any complaints regarding the word choice, though as compared to the rest of the poems I have read in past, the words do not leave that kind of deep impact. But it can be because it is more of an individual thing.


The punctuation is missed at some places, especially in second para which at least calls for a period. Also you need to give a break around the line Family outings in the woody station wagon in both of the places as it seems incomplete for now.


The mention of similar dresses and threading of the ribbon which captured the childhood siblings quite well.


As I said not the best of your work, but I enjoyed wading through this small pool of you memories. Thanks for sharing these memories.

Keep Writing!

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