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| Hi, Kasia. I'm here to review your item in conjunction with
Overall Impression This was a fun read, easy to visualize because your descriptions are vivid and the characters distinctive and memorable. I used to live right next to the Susquehana River in New York State, but it was forever a muddy brown. I always wished for the clear water of the Turakina River during the autumn season. Characters/Setting/Plot The setting is lovingly described as a river scene. All the characters felt real and I had to double check to ascertain this was a fictitious story. Excellent writing. I knew kids who had similar personalities to the ones in your story. I don't like putting my head under water, but if someone wrapped me up in towels and threw me in, it would probably be the last time I swam. The highlight of the plot was when the main character decided to take on a personal challenge. Girl power, unite! I looked for a character name, but since there was no direct dialogue, I couldn't find one. Your heroine's plight was harrowing, and I felt her hesitation, fear (she had good reason) and her determination. Her inner dialogue kept me keyed into her feelings—she was so cute when she pointed out she was not fat—while the descriptions of the tree gave me the physicality. I was worried her family and friends would not see her jump and what would be the point without witnesses? When she finally plunged, wow. I was holding my breath. If she sunk all the way to the bottom, I hope the kids made shallow dives, not risking a broken neck. It's often said that conquering your worst fear frees you, but I never expected her willingness to repeat her feat! What a wild and wonderful character. Considerations Watch out for those passive verbs, and take advantage of including dialogue for a more vibrant read.  Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your work. It was my pleasure! ** Image ID #1921223 Unavailable **    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/24/2013 @ 6:48pm EDT