WHAT IS A POEM? [E] [A poem must have flow. Rhyme adds to the quality.] |
Hi there Dr M C Gupta , Thanks for allowing me to review your work! I greatly enjoyed reading your poem today. This is another interesting, philosophical take on a much perused subject matter. I liked that you added a humorous touch at the end, preventing this poem from holding too much critical gravitas, as can often happen with an opinion piece. Having said that, I feel you may need to take a look at your opening lines for the first two stanzas. The sentence, "What's a poem and what it/ Does represent in fact?", perhaps was intended to read, 'What's a poem, and what/ Does it represent, in fact.' (I found similar syntax issues in the opening lines of your second stanza also.) I've taken the liberty of adding in a couple of commas where I feel it might make your lines flow better. I also suggest that it might be worth expanding, "What's", to instead read, "What is". Somehow, the informality of it just doesn't feel quite right for the tone of this poem. The rhyme and meter are solid - the content seemed perhaps slightly on the superficial side. It seemed not to go into any great exploration of the questions that were initially posed, and it appears that your final answer leaves a lot left to be said regarding what makes a poem, as complex a topic as that might be! I would love to see this expanded! Overall, a fun read, and I look forward to stopping by more of your work. Thank you! Wyrd My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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