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Hi Sarah Kate,

The following comments are my opinion. Take what you can use and leave the rest.
I will review this considering your word constraints.


The Heart of the Story/Poem:
The tone feels resentful, even though you didn't explicitly come out and say it, you communicated it. Great work! A flash about a male character that due to his skin disease cannot be exposed to sunlight. He grapples with it in his mind and you give us a peek. You only had so many words and/or certain words you had to incorporate.

Things That Might Make It Better:
(Mention some specific ideas that could make their story or poem stronger)

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
I noted NONE

Things I Like:
I admire your ability to write so little content, but have so much packed into it. Good job. You set the scene, the background, and we finally are told at the end he is not a vampire. Thank goodness. While reading I thought it would end up that way. Surprise ( I'm glad) he wasn't. I think you did a wonderful job on this short. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing.

Grace L
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