Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Anniversary

Overall impression of piece: Interesting. I get the pain and anguish. Life certainly isn't fair. It gets worse as you get older. I hope you are still with us

Grammatical and spelling errors Quotes are not done well. A split quoote would be like this. "Help," she said, "Before it is too late." It's way unless there is more than one it which wouldn't make sense. Hareful doesn't make sense. I would suspect hateful

What I liked? Very visceral descriptions. I can see what is going on

What I disliked:This is hard to read. You need to either indent paragraphs, or ,my favorite, leave a line in between. I never really know what her feelings are post death and whether death was worth it.

How the piece made me feel I kind of see a darkness in suicide. I think the answers looked for in suicide, won't be there. God, I think wants us to live through the pain and help others live through theirs.

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