OVERALL SENSE: You started out with excitement right from the beginning. I know I may be partial to female characters, but that is what drew me to this story. The title and the word supernatural made it all the more enticing.

Great characters, great descriptions which all added to the appeal of this story.

         TITLE APPEAL: ”The Sisterhood” is the name of this story. It definitely fits!

         STYLE/VOICE: The style is horror/mystery. The voice stays strong as each girl is excited about staying in an old abandoned house until…

         TONE/MOOD: I felt the tone to be more somber but with an excitement mix as they enter this huge dilapidated house.

The mood was mixed between the girls. Some where there to have fun and nothing was going to stand in their way to achieve it. So determination and an enticing atmosphere added to the appeal.

         SCENE/SETTING: The scene and setting takes place in an old abandoned house. Upon entering, something doesn’t feel to Ginger as she spies this old painting on the wall.

         CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Marlene and Ginger definitely have the right idea about this old house. They are the only ones who seem to feel the evil vibes coming off the place. Then when they thought the man in the painting’s eyes moved, they were definitely creeped out.

Personality: Each girl in this story have their own personalities. Sabrina is the ring leader, and Doreen, Tammy and Kelly seem to follow suit. Traci on the other hand seems brave enough or just wants the others to think that, but as the end she caved into her fears, too along with Kelly.

Motivation: The girls discovered a diary that explains a lot of the occurrences that happened during the years. They find out what needs to be done to save themselves. They had to do away with an evil necklace hanging around the owner Dakota Fleming;s neck.

         PLOT: A haunted house attracts seven women and they decide to hold a party there for just them. Upon entering, two of the women feel the bad vibes and become unsure about what they are about to do. I was a little surprise at how easily they dismissed Doreen’s disappearance. It felt so uncaring and their remarks made me flinch. I wouldn’t want to be friends with Kelly and Tammy, that’s for sure!

Structure: The plot is well planned and unfolds smoothly as each scene is revealed.

Development: The development feels real, each character reacts to certain things differently. It seemed all very natural and exactly how teens would act. The descriptions are made clear and I could picture the house as the girls toured it.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/SENTENCE STRUCTURE: Everything looks okay.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: NONE

         LIKES: I like these scary, haunted house stories and I wasn’t disappointed. Very suspenseful!

         DISLIKES: NONE

FAVORITE LINE(S): I did have some favorite lines that I would like to highlight. I'll explain why I like them and how they added to the story.

          QUOTE HERE: Marlene and Ginger spotted it simultaneously and almost choked on the liquor. The eyes had moved! Having glanced at the painting adorning the wall unconsciously, both young women had witnessed the demonic looking man’s dark eyes move and the pendant worn about his neck change from a coppery hue to that of a bright red that nearly blinded them.

          My Comment: My interest really perked up right here when I read this. If I was Marlene and Ginger, I would have walked out right then and there. But peer pressure made them stay, and they decided to make the best of their time with their friends. I love this description and the women’s reaction to the portrait coming alive.

JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION:Another great read from you portfolio. Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece.



Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .