Hi groovygirl,

Thanks for sharing your poem. I liked the personification of winter's wrath, its movements and final death. The ending image is lovely.

My only criticism concerns the lines:

"Of all that spring gave way to fall."

and

"And in its wake, the silent pall."

The rhythm seems a bit off here. The other ending lines were six syllables a piece and this seemed to flow better. The first quoted line above also felt a bit muddled to me as a reader. I wasn't quite sure what you meant to say.

Thanks again for sharing this piece! I hope my comments were helpful.

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