Greetings! Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item. If you disagree with any of the suggestions below, feel free to ignore them. FORMAT: At a glance, I know right away if it is appealing on the page and is easy to read and understand. If it is in one huge paragraph, it becomes too difficult to read. Make use of white space between paragraphs and character dialogue. The format of your letter is very nice and quite easy to read. However I would have appreciated a little bigger font SETTING: This is important. A nice balance of imagery and well written word makes me feel as if I am there, but overdone it ends up being repetitive and redundant. The setting here is that you are writing a letter to yourself to convince yourself to do and achieve certain goals. I read somewhere that writing down your goals increase the chance of you actually performing that action so bravo! LENGTH: If the piece is overly long, then I am more reluctant to read it, but if it's intriguing, I still might. The length of the piece is long but the small font did the trick and I was interested in reading what your goals were. GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: While punctuation errors can make a piece impossible to read, often I can pass over them, depending on what it is, and noting where and what so the writer can go back and revise them. It is often something easily fixed. There were none that I could fine DIALOGUE: N/A POINT OF VIEW: I must know who's point of view we are in. The point of view was clear. FLOW: The story must not only be told in a logical order, but must have a feel to it. That means I 'm not stopping and starting abruptly, or stumbling over the words or distanced for some other reason. The flow of your letter was good, formal, persuading but encouraging. I am amazed you reached your goal and came up to 417 reviews in total MY FAVORITE PART: The look of your letter was nice. I liked the way you divided up the goals into sections. What I thought might be missing was maybe, goals from your daily life THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK! Write On! Have a nice day/night! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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