Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Birthday

Overall impression of piece: I really enjoyed this. We often wonder as we read our bibles,what is the story behind the story. I have a piece where Priests are looking at the Temple cloth the day after Jesus death tore it. I am sure there was some explaining to do. You really hopped to it on this piece on frogs

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked? I like how Ra is capitalized and Hebrew god is not. Good attention to detail. You are right. You can pray peace and it will be given, even in trying times. Eventually the royal family does get the word and reluctantly let them go. They change there minds and chase them at the Red Sea. Peace can be a tangible thing. Well portrayed

What I disliked: Mariah seems like a Jewish name, but the context says she is not. It is a little unclear who she is. thebes is a royal city. I somehow get the feeling they are royalty, but am not sure.

How the piece made me feel: It is really classy to put in links to Wikepedia and to biblegateway. I did look them up. You wrote a great story on what already was a great story

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