Hello!
I'm Marci Missing Everyone . I am reviewing your piece as an entry in the "FIVE STAR POETRY CONTEST:editor's choice" . Anything I say is just my humble opinion. Use whatever you can and send the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day.

Personal Impression - I wholeheartedly agree with the premise of the poem. Reminds me of that song that says "sometimes you're the windshield, and sometimes you're the bug."

Tone & Mood - You effectively set the tone & mood of the entire poem within the first stanza. Especially with the lines...

"Life’s a bowl of cherries but
It has lemons sometimes."

To me this means that sometimes life is sweet and sometimes it is sour. Erma Bombeck once wrote, "If life is like a bowl of cherries, then what am I doing in the pits?" I often feel that way.

Rhyme, Form & Flow - I like the rhyme scheme and the pattern that you have set forth. For me, there were a couple of issues with flow. After reading a few of your poems, I started to wonder if it maybe the odd syllables counts in your lines with the 7/6/7/6 in your stanza's were to blame for this. For example:

"That after the plane took off,
It exploded midair.
Killing all the passengers.
I had an escape rare."

The second line would read better, "it exploded in midair."
The fourth line here is quite awkward to read. I'm not sure of the exact way to fix it, though.

Grammar/Punctuation - As far as I could see, the punctuation was fine. The one suggestion that I havge here is not to capitalize words just because they are at the beginning of a new line. It helps the reader when we follow these simple things. I know it goes against the norm, but it is more and more expected to follow regular grammar rules rather than old poetry rules.

My favorite lines in the poem were:

"On some days we get dollars,
On others, only dimes."

Keep writing! I will be excited to review other pieces of poetry in the future as I feel I would like to enter your contest.

Sincerely,
Marci Missing Everyone
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