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Happy WDC Anniversary Suteki


The Heart of the Story/Poem:
This is a story from the first person perspective about a rehab experience.

Things That Might Make It Better:
I'm thinking maybe more emotions added to this piece would make it read on a more personal level. Readers love to feel the same thing your characters are feeling, seeing, and smelling.

This just needs to be tweaked on some things. One thing is the dialogue, which is a tricky thing to get down. When you change speakers, it is not always necessary to tag it with who is speaking. Like I said this is tricky.

Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:
You wrote: "Why do you think people relapse?" Rick ask. My suggestion add "ed" to the end of ask.

Things I Like:
I like the description of the needle marks. They are right on target. I like that there are questions in the dialogue. Just For Today. I hope you come back and re-visit this piece. Keep coming back. As always take what you can use and leave the rest. The above are only my opinion as a reader and I am a writer like you. You are the author!
Happy Anniversary again!
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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .