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 | Death Of An Immortal  [18+] The last testament of a vampire  |
| (4.5)| ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Hi. I am Kimelia . I noticed you are celebrating your WDC anniversary - Congratulations. I hope you enjoy your special day! I really enjoyed reading your work and I hope that my review is helpful.This is only my opinion and whether you agree with my opinion is up to you. If you have any questions about my review, please contact me. Thanks for sharing your work and HAPPY ANNIVERSARY!!!Title: "Death Of An Immortal" Author: Andrea My overall opinion: Your story is really interesting and I enjoyed reading it. Your writing flows well and is easy to read and follow. Point of View: The point of view is 1st person. Characters: The narrator who is writing a letter to her victim, Dr.Flannigan. Your character is well developed and there are no inconsistencies. Plot/Pace: The plot is interesting, a dying vampire is writing a letter to her victim. You have an interesting, and unique, view on vampires. The plot moves at a good pace. Dialogue: There is no dialogue. Grammar/Punctuation: I did not notice any mistakes. Suggestions for Revision: I did not notice any mistakes, but I would recommend that you revise the following sentence, specifically the part that is highlighted. I tried to control myself but, when I failed ,would end up killing frenziedly, like an animal. This is a review in conjunction with "AFaith's Unofficial Account BDay Event" We're going bananas over here; join us, we have internet cookies  Final Thoughts
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