I selected your poem from those newly published on the Reading Newbies forum of WdC. Welcome, to Writing.com. Your experience in this community will surely be a positive and creative one. I am glad you have published your work here.
 
It was a real pleasure reading your work and I am pleased to give you some impressions I have of your piece as well as a short review.
 
My review is based solely on my opinion and feelings. While I may suggest some structural alterations, I prefer to lend my feelings and impressions in the hopes that they may be of some help and encourage further thought about what has been created. Please take what you think is appropriate for your work and disregard the rest.
 
Overall Impression
Empty.    It seems like a small word, like it needs more to help the world understand it. And yet for the heartbroken, what more is there to say about the soul that has experienced so much loss. What is put into that void created by “empty”, “it was my fault”, “I could have been more”, “wasn’t I invested?” “it was just bad”. I rethought a hundred bad relationships reading your words. I am no longer the “empty”, but your words remind me how close I live to the edge.
 
Interest and Pace
My interest is provoked by the use of the word “empty” as the core theme of your poem. The sparseness of the words and images support the underlying power of the emotions the word “empty” can invoke. Its surface looks simple, but as you move me along the alleyway of thoughts about loss, and abuse and ultimately abandonment I am swiftly swept into your pain that is a part of every person’s life evolution.
 
Structure and Clarity
The lines of several words followed by a single word break is a form and structure that highlights the individual words that make it easy for me to stop and weigh their individual truth. The images are mine of course, but you have spun the ultimate thought that comes to my mind as I meditate on each word. There is no better way to keep it all clear for me. I am left to be responsible for what I feel. You have made me comfortable with that.
 
Edits/Revisions
I did not find any place within the work where I would recommend edits or revisions.
 
Summary
A man gets up. He chooses to embrace life and all that it has to offer. He sits down and meditates on what was and what might have been. Your poem is full and that is a powerful contrast to the theme of “empty”. Thank you for a hundred memories, painful and otherwise. It was good to revisit some of the fabric of my soul that often goes unexamined.
 
 
Please have a blessed and creative day!
 
~Kenword~
 
 
 
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