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Overall Impression
 
“The Beach” is a detail rich story of a woman taking her family and friend on a crazy ride to the beach. Her son is frustrated, bemused and sometimes exhilerated by his mother’s antics behind the wheel. As the unsolicited advice of her friend becomes a thorn in the her side, the family's ride to the beach endures some fabulous stunt driving. This is something that spices up an otherwise dreary two hour car trip and a wonderfully conceived story.
 
Interest and Pace
 
I love the characterization of the mom. She is vital, rich and amazingly adept at navigating the challenges of life fearlessly, even driving her impatient son and friend to the beach. A baby who sleeps through the whole ordeal is a wonderful touch and a great contrast to the anxiousness of the other passengers. The story moves along to a wonderful conclusion with great glimpses of how the characters interact with each other and the challenging world around them.
 
Structure and Clarity
 
The plot, “getting to the beach,” is well conceived. My favorite stories are ones where I’m presented with a simple challenge well thought through. You have accomplished this in your story. Everything else clearly adds flavor, turning a simple excursion into an exciting story.
 
Edits/Revisions
 
There are a few grammatical improvements that could be made, but I didn’t feel there was a need for much revision other than that. An example of what needs correcting is in your opening sentence: There is no words to describe what I'm feeling right now. the verb in the sentence should be “are” instead of “is”. Again, this and a few other simple corrections will keep your readers from being distracted.
Summary
 
I like the descriptions of the drive and the son’s thoughts and point of view throughout the story. The conclusion is a beautiful contrast to the harrowing/boring trip and there is great satisfaction as “…mom’s mood lightened”.
 
A good fun read.
Thank you!
 
~Kenword~
 
 
 
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